Friday, February 10, 2012

Flash Fiction (blogfest)

Last day of the I'm Hearing Voices blogfest! This time around it's a flash fiction (>251 words). This is Troy again, from my Monday interview.

Today ended the war. Today the mountains became peaceful.
Today she married him.
I thought they would have fought with me, knowing the truth about him. But they told me to let it go, that we'd find another way. Morcant had proofed the castle so I couldn't penetrate it, with or without magic. I couldn't get to her.
Egan found me in Dunthur City.
"Come back," he said. "There's nothing we can do."
She had the necklace, though, as far as I knew. With the necklace, maybe she'd find me. Or maybe she never discovered the truth. Maybe she'd never remember me.
I'd always remember her, with her aspirations and flowers and determination. I remembered the first time I saw her, the first time we kissed, our last moment together.
I'd never know if she did remember. I'd probably never see her again.
Today she became the Queen of Thesland. And I was forgotten.

19 comments:

  1. That's depressing, which is probably what you were going for. : ) Nice work!

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  2. Aw, this is so heartbreaking! Poor guy. She better not forget him!

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  3. That is so sad! I hope things turn out better for him. :-)

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  4. P.S. Here to follow you, campaign buddy. ;-)

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  5. Totally heartbreaking! And this is beautifully written Jenna. Really! Just beautiful! If this was the first 250 of a novel I would be totally sucked in.

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  6. So sad! But beautifully written. Those last three sentences are so powerful.


    I'd never know if she did remember. I'd probably never see her again.Today she became the Queen of Thesland. And I was forgotten.

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  7. longing. havent many peaceful emotions. great job!

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  8. Aww. :( How sad. I hope this isn't the end of the story!!

    Also, I am a fellow campaign buddy!! :D

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  9. I just signed up for the campaign, myself. Loved your flash. Hope to read more of your stuff. :)

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  10. This is wonderful. Beautifully written.

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  11. I wanted you to know you are in my top 10 for this challenge :)

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    1. Wow, I'm honored again! Seriously, this means a lot to me. :)

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  12. Hi. I'm in your campaign group. Just saying hi. Thanks for stopping by my blog. =)

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  13. Beautiful! Reminds me of Downton Abbey, possibly because I'm obsessed with it. :) I'm Laurie, from your campaign group, too! Thanks for stopping by my blog!

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  14. This so sad - I get a great sense of yearning and loss.Sorry to be late stopping by, but I really enjoyed reading this.

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  15. I want to know what's behind the necklace now. :)

    Great writing!

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  16. Hi again! Just wanted to let you know I awarded you with a Kreativ Blogger Award today over on my blog :)

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