Friday, February 10, 2012

Flash Fiction (blogfest)

Last day of the I'm Hearing Voices blogfest! This time around it's a flash fiction (>251 words). This is Troy again, from my Monday interview.

Today ended the war. Today the mountains became peaceful.
Today she married him.
I thought they would have fought with me, knowing the truth about him. But they told me to let it go, that we'd find another way. Morcant had proofed the castle so I couldn't penetrate it, with or without magic. I couldn't get to her.
Egan found me in Dunthur City.
"Come back," he said. "There's nothing we can do."
She had the necklace, though, as far as I knew. With the necklace, maybe she'd find me. Or maybe she never discovered the truth. Maybe she'd never remember me.
I'd always remember her, with her aspirations and flowers and determination. I remembered the first time I saw her, the first time we kissed, our last moment together.
I'd never know if she did remember. I'd probably never see her again.
Today she became the Queen of Thesland. And I was forgotten.
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19 comments:

  1. Emily R. KingFebruary 10, 2012 at 8:08 PM

    That's depressing, which is probably what you were going for. : ) Nice work!

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  2. MeredithFebruary 10, 2012 at 10:36 PM

    Aw, this is so heartbreaking! Poor guy. She better not forget him!

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  3. Misha GerrickFebruary 11, 2012 at 3:44 AM

    That is so sad! I hope things turn out better for him. :-)

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  4. Misha GerrickFebruary 11, 2012 at 3:45 AM

    P.S. Here to follow you, campaign buddy. ;-)

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  5. Angela CothranFebruary 11, 2012 at 9:32 AM

    Totally heartbreaking! And this is beautifully written Jenna. Really! Just beautiful! If this was the first 250 of a novel I would be totally sucked in.

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  6. SaraFebruary 11, 2012 at 2:18 PM

    So sad! But beautifully written. Those last three sentences are so powerful.


    I'd never know if she did remember. I'd probably never see her again.Today she became the Queen of Thesland. And I was forgotten.

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  7. Tara TylerFebruary 11, 2012 at 2:35 PM

    longing. havent many peaceful emotions. great job!

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  8. UnknownFebruary 11, 2012 at 3:04 PM

    Aww. :( How sad. I hope this isn't the end of the story!!

    Also, I am a fellow campaign buddy!! :D

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  9. AnonymousFebruary 11, 2012 at 4:53 PM

    I just signed up for the campaign, myself. Loved your flash. Hope to read more of your stuff. :)

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  10. Leigh CovingtonFebruary 11, 2012 at 5:23 PM

    This is wonderful. Beautifully written.

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  11. Angela CothranFebruary 11, 2012 at 9:19 PM

    I wanted you to know you are in my top 10 for this challenge :)

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    1. Jenna CooperFebruary 11, 2012 at 9:59 PM

      Wow, I'm honored again! Seriously, this means a lot to me. :)

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  12. E. ArroyoFebruary 11, 2012 at 9:47 PM

    Hi. I'm in your campaign group. Just saying hi. Thanks for stopping by my blog. =)

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  13. Laurie DennisonFebruary 12, 2012 at 9:44 AM

    Beautiful! Reminds me of Downton Abbey, possibly because I'm obsessed with it. :) I'm Laurie, from your campaign group, too! Thanks for stopping by my blog!

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  14. Hywela LynFebruary 12, 2012 at 9:51 AM

    This so sad - I get a great sense of yearning and loss.Sorry to be late stopping by, but I really enjoyed reading this.

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  15. Meradeth HoustonFebruary 12, 2012 at 12:44 PM

    Oh wow, great snippet! Heartbreaking!

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  16. Golden EagleFebruary 12, 2012 at 6:21 PM

    I want to know what's behind the necklace now. :)

    Great writing!

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  17. Traci KenworthFebruary 13, 2012 at 6:00 AM

    That was awesome!!

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  18. Laurie DennisonFebruary 13, 2012 at 10:30 AM

    Hi again! Just wanted to let you know I awarded you with a Kreativ Blogger Award today over on my blog :)

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